Name: Electrical Detonation
Rank: A
Mana Cost: 200
Requirements: Lightning Dragon Slayer
Type: Offensive
Element: Lightning
Range: 20 meters
Cooldown: 4 Posts
Duration: Instant
Effect: Roman snaps his finger on any hand causing an electrical explosion to detonate around him originating from the hand used. Due to being immune to his own element he is not harmed by this. The explosion is a 8 diameter dome  in size and spreads out to max size before dissipating. Anyone caught in it will suffer 1 A rank electrical burn/blunt force trauma.


Name: Thor's Hammer
Rank: B
Mana Cost: 100
Requirements: Lightning Dragon Slayer
Type: Offensive
Element: Lightning
Range: 15 Meters
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Duration: Instant
Effect: Upon flexing any part of his arms Roman's arms he supercharges them. (He can only super charge one arm at a time) In this state energy is focused within his fist and upon impacting a object/person it is all released at once. If a object is struck this power is transferred to the object causing it to fly in a straight line for 15 meters. If a person or solid surface is struck, the energy will be released. This energy discharges causing a explosion at the point of impact. The explosion is 4 meters in diameter of raw electrical energy. Anyone caught in it will suffer 1 B rank electrical burn/blunt force trauma. Does knockback 2-4 meters. This can be used to launch a small item like a rock or something of that nature from the environment. When throwing a object from the environment it only applies the spell damage.


Name: Thunderous Roar
Rank: B
Mana Cost: 100
Requirements: Lightning Dragon Slayer
Type: Offensive
Element: Lightning
Range: 15 Meters
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Duration: Instant
Effect: Roman opens his mouth and laser. It does damage from the point it fires, until the point it ends. The laser is 4 meters in diameter. It travels to its designated area and detonates upon impact. Or it can be detonated by hitting a surface, oject or person. This causes a 4 diameter explosion to occur. It does 1 B rank electrical damage.


Name: Killer Queen
Rank: B
Mana Cost: 100
Requirements: Lightning Dragon Slayer
Type: Offensive
Element: Lightning
Range: 20 meters
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Duration: Sustain
Effect: By opening his hand Roman creates a blue, baseball sized orb with wings it flutters around him until it detects something with a magical presence. (This means friend or foe) It moves wherever Roman goes. He can control it with his index finger to make it fly around on a whim. It has a max range of 20 meters. It tries to pierce the target with B rank damage before flying back to Roman.

(This is the reworked version of thunder caller so its not vague same concept however.)

Let's go from the bottom to the top, shall we?

Fist Lvl 2: Hm, I'm gonna say no to it being allowed prematurely, but here's an idea that could work. Instead of making it a secondary option to be premature, make it the primary point that it detonates. So, kind of like: Step 1: Close fist 2: Dragon comes out Step 3: Open fist, chomps.

Thunder Caller: Actually was told from Jyu before he left DS spells must come from the body out, so this one is a no as it is.

Roar: Kinda similar to Fist, except you've already got an action for it. Again, one or the other - upon impact or upon fist that it detonates.

Hammer: Either knockback or damage, one or the other - finally, the knockback would be 15 as it's the max range of a B-rank.

A-rank is alright.

Uh been a few days bump?

Alright, my bad on the previous statements.

Level 2 However still needs a motion for ending prematurely.

As for Hammer, yeah, the explosion would still knock them back. The problem here was that you were going for very, very high levels of knockback. Offensive spells would still knock people back, because that's natural of them to do so. But anything more than 2-4 meters starts to get more into the realm of a knockback specific spell.

Finished bump fam

Thor's Hammer still has the previous problems. If you want knockback of such an amount it needs to be knockback-only. Otherwise, it's just a normal offensive spells (but keep in mind even those would knock you opponent back through logic, just not nearly as high as you're goin for)

https://www.fairytailrp.com/t41870-new-person-same-old-mistakes-training-open#353688

6000 words, discounted by 5% = 5,700 words.

Training complete.

Bumped for revamp completion

Hey there. Let's get right to it.

Electrical Detonation:

• Approved
  

Thor's Hammer:

• This is far more of a me being a Grammar Nazi, but with "If a person or solid surface is struck. The energy will be released at once.", if you could remove the period between the two and replace it with a comma, it makes it much easier to follow and know exactly what where the damage in the sentence following is referenced and originates from.
  
• Just provide clarification as to the damage itself. Would it be simply the base strength of a weapon converted to a static rank in addition to the damage of the spell or just the weapon itself? I assume that with like a rock it'd be just the spell damage?
  

Thunderous Roar:

• Approved.
  

Could it be the shoes?

• I reserve judgment on this spell until it is brought under for review and/or more clarification as to the legality and/or implementation of an Embodiment spell would work and constraints/capabilities of them are considered.
  

With regards to Could it be the shoes, I will make a ruling once it has been determined as to the status and legality of the spell.

For the others, bump when edited.

Congratulations, these spells have been approved for use.