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#1Ghost 

Disciple Of Destruction  Empty Mon Jan 25, 2021 4:11 am

Ghost
Name: Crash
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Crash Magic
Type: Offensive
Element: Arcane
Range: 5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 Post
Duration: Instant
Effect: Ghost will hold out a hand. The grey magical circle will appear. As he activates his CRASH MAGIC. Which will send out a shock wave invisible to the naked eye. The shock wave is 0.25 meters in diameter. If an opponent is hit by it, it will do C-rank damage and knock the opponent back 10 meters.

Name: Crash Punch
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Crash Magic
Type: Offensive
Element: Arcane
Range: 5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 post
Duration: Instant
Effect: The user will ball up a fist coated with magic and then he will strike at the target, doing C-rank damage to them and knocking them back 10 meters. This is done as he uses his Crash Magic to give the punch extra power. As he does this the magical circle will activate upon attacking.

Name: The Power Of The Saint
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Crash Magic
Type: Offense
Element: Arcane
Range: 5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 post
Duration: Instant
Effect: The user touches an opponent with their hand, and the magical circle appears. Using his Crash Magic, he will then send an invisible shock wave with a 0.25 meter diameter through them at point blank range doing C-rank damage.

Name: Delayed Impact
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Crash Magic
Type: Offensive
Element: Arcane
Range: 5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 post
Duration: Instant
Effect: The user, when throwing a punch at a target and making contact, that is the activation of this spell. It will cause a blast of Crash Magic to flow from his fist with a 0.25 meter diameter, launching out at the target that it made contact with, causing the target hit by this spell to take C-rank Damage and be knocked back 10 meters.



Last edited by Ghost on Wed Jan 27, 2021 7:27 pm; edited 13 times in total

#2Ghost 

Disciple Of Destruction  Empty Mon Jan 25, 2021 4:11 am

Ghost
Bump Bump a

#3Mikajia 

Disciple Of Destruction  Empty Mon Jan 25, 2021 7:27 am

Mikajia
You have created a new topic for these spells, and fixed their ranks. That's good. However, it's abundantly clear, that you still haven't read through the Spell & Magic Regulations. If you would like a member of staff to read through and edit and approve your spells, then it is required of you to actually read the regulations I just linked. It would not be fair in the slightest for any of us to fix your spells for you, simply because you didn't want to read the regulations like everyone else on the site, that has submitted spells for review. And lastly, because it's not all that clear in the regulations, I'll tell you this, as a D-Rank mage, you get four free D-Rank spells, and you have access to one C-Rank spell slot. If you want to make a C-Rank spell, you'll have to submit a different topic for that specific spell. If it gets approved, you then have to train it in a training topic, or purchase it.

Because you have been told twice now by me to read the regulations and fix your spells appropriately, and have completely ignored the edits given to you by the last staff member, if it is clear that you haven't done as I have suggested here, there will be consequences. Save yourself and staff the trouble please, and simply just read through the regulations.

The reason I know you haven't, or reasons rather, are simple. I'll give you three here:

  • Requirement
  • Mana Cost
  • Damage


There are more issues with your spells than those I just listed, but those are the most obvious. If you had read the regulations, you would know this yourself, and have already fixed them.



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#4Ghost 

Disciple Of Destruction  Empty Mon Jan 25, 2021 4:47 pm

Ghost
Yeah that's on me I posted the wrong load bank. But the new one up. I have went thorough all the rules. I think I meet the requirements and change things up to reflect it all. This should be ready for review

#5Mikajia 

Disciple Of Destruction  Empty Mon Jan 25, 2021 5:25 pm

Mikajia
You've adjusted the mana cost appropriately, and you have mentioned the magic circle in three of your spells, but not the fourth. However, you've also not fixed the bit about the Requirements. That is something that Venus told you repeatedly to fix when you made your first spells. Just because you switched magic, does not mean that you go back to doing the same thing. And if you had looked through the spell crafting template, it would have even told you what to place there. Continuing to do something that you were told not to do several times, displays a blatant disregard for the regulations. This is not difficult information to find. It is given to you. You could even easily look at someone else's spells for an example.

Tiers are used for describing Attributes and the bonuses they provide, they have nothing to do with a spell's damage or potency. You have even used a type of measurement for your spells that isn't used anywhere at all on the site, or listed at any point in any of the regulations.

You at least have the range and dimension of the spells correct, however, you have the dimensions listed in the range section. Somewhere they obviously don't belong.

Considering you have the correct numbers listed for mana cost, range and dimensions of spells, I'm willing to believe that you looked through the regulations. However, considering you still have several mistakes and have continued to ignore an exceedingly simple fix, I also believe that you only very briefly looked through them. Read them again. Thoroughly. They will tell you everything you need to fix your spells. You're not doing yourself any favors by continuing to not do this simple thing.



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#6Ghost 

Disciple Of Destruction  Empty Wed Jan 27, 2021 7:28 pm

Ghost
Ok that should do it XD

#7Aegis 

Disciple Of Destruction  Empty Wed Feb 10, 2021 5:07 pm

Aegis

Hello there, i'll be taking over your spell review.

First and foremost, as a Berserker your offensive spells cannot be ranged, and must be touch/coating. "Normal: Offensive - Touch-based Only"




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#8Ghost 

Disciple Of Destruction  Empty Wed Feb 10, 2021 7:31 pm

Ghost
I know I am working on changing my class now and J am aware that my spells will be locked until I do... Just need the ok for them.

#9Aegis 

Disciple Of Destruction  Empty Fri Feb 12, 2021 6:31 pm

Aegis

I asked an admin to make sure, but you cannot make new spells that conflict with your class. Once the class changes done I can go through and get them done.




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#10Karisa 

Disciple Of Destruction  Empty Thu Mar 04, 2021 5:19 pm

Karisa

The user has 48 hours to reply to their spell thread notifying that they still wish to finish their spells before it becomes archived.

#11Ghost 

Disciple Of Destruction  Empty Mon Mar 22, 2021 1:59 pm

Ghost
Ummm the thing is I need to change the class over

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